the open window - tan renga

This week's Tan Renga Challenge at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai is a hokku by Jane Reichhold.
The challenge is to add 2 lines to it.

 The host of Carpe Diem, Chévrefeuille has taken the hokku forward beautifully.

the open window
screened with a web
leaf shadows                          (Jane Reichhold)

the buzzing of a fly stops
a spider's dinner                     (Chèvrefeuille)


 I tried quite a bit but couldn't come up with something that I felt was half as good.
Anyway these are the result of efforts.
the open window
screened with a web
leaf shadows                          (Jane Reichhold)

Moving shadow, spider scampers
-wind's mischief, o sun's routine  (Nimi Arora)


 And here's another one -
the open window
screened with a web
leaf shadows                          (Jane Reichhold)

eagerly waiting eyes
hope unscreened                     (Nimi Arora)



 Prompt by and Shared with-
Carpe Diem Tan Renga Challenge #108
http://chevrefeuillescarpediem.blogspot.in/2016/07/carpe-diem-tan-renga-challenge-108.html









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